[Excerpt from revamped and edited business plan]

Conclusion

The purchase of this building in Santa Rafael will allow our already successful company to expand into new areas. It will give us the capability to warehouse all of our equipment in one space. More importantly, we will be able to bring all of our people and concepts—including design, production and distribution—together under one roof.

Such synergy will allow us to expand our already vibrant creative processes and, ultimately, bring about new and exciting products and programs for our community. Best of all, we’ll have greater power to improve and transform people’s lives forever through fitness.

We feel that this practical plan, along with Jolene’s unique market position, offers you as an investor a number of positives, including:

• Jolene’s strategic alliances with topnotch infomercial firms, production companies and leaders in the health and fitness industry lend credibility to this ambitious business plan.

• Moving forward on this purchase will position all of our investors as active participants in Santa Rafael’s community planning.

• It will allow you to participate in the rebuilding of the historic Santa Rafael area. The city’s growth and expansion have already attracted major developers, all of whom are investing billions of dollars into the city’s planned “renaissance.”

• Not to be forgotten, you will also help play an active role in addressing our community’s need for education in health and fitness.

Together, we can broaden Jolene Enterprises' market reach, create new jobs in our community and, over the long term, shape the health and fitness industry. Our combined energies—yours and ours—will leave an indelible and positive imprint on our community.

Warren Buffet has said that, when deciding whether or not to invest, one must look to see who is at the helm of the company. If you like what you see, invest.

We agree completely.

[Same excerpt from the original business plan]

Conclusion

Jolene's strategic alliances with top notch infomercial firms, production companies and leaders in the health and fitness industry lend credibility to this ambitious business plan.

Moving forward on this purchase will position you as an active participant in Santa Rafael's community planning.

It will allow you to participate in the rebuilding of a historic community known as Santa Rafael, California.  It's growth and expansion have attracted major players like the Hennessy Group, Tyler & Balm and other huge developers, all of whom are investing billions of dollars into the city’s planed “Renaissance.

And, you will play an active role in addressing our communities’ needs for education in health and fitness.

Together, we can broaden Jolene Enterprises, market reach and ultimately, create new jobs in our community and in the health and fitness industry. 

Owning this building would allow us to warehouse all of our equipment and have a space where we could bring all of our people and concepts together.  This would allow for the creative processes, with which we operate from, to bring forth new and inspiring works.  Ultimately, we’ll have greater power to improve and transform people’s lives forever. 

Our relationship, your and ours, would leave an indelible and positive imprint on our society.

As Warren Buffet once said, look to see who is at the helm of the company you are investing in, if you like what you see, invest.